Matt Bellamy

Tattoo has two T's. "i see a tree ashen silk bark peeling"-this line was a bit of a tongue twister for me, couldn't quite get my head around it. Loved ...

Great imagery and description, I could picture this in my head. There was something I didn't like about the London bridge references, I didn't fully understand why they were in ...

I'm not sure, maybe straight after the first one? Makes it sound more intense. And maybe put the second bleed in italics? Bleed until you are sorry Bleed until you ...

I don't know. But some people don't capitalise, intentionally.

The last stanza does rhyme, doesn't it? I think this rhymed and flowed well, and an interesting idea. Good job.

"I love so you so much" -One too many so's, I think. Other than that, everyone's pretty much said what I was going to say. I'd prefer the poem though ...

I personally liked the last line. However I have to disagree, titles are relevant. An unnamed poem is like an unnamed baby. Or so I've been told.

I can imagine this being spoken. Beautiful last line. Good work.

Yeah, I agree. Good rhyming, not forced at all, short and sweet. Good job.

I liked the last stanza, it seemed quite symbolic, an anti-climax to show something has ended. Good description, well delivered.

*blinks* Interesting read. Very interesting. Tee hee.

I didn't get it, but it was written well enough for me to like it anyway. Apart from that, I can't really comment. Strong piece.

I think the last stanza finishes off the poem nicely, like "I'm done talking now, I'm just going to lie here and let you take it all in." Yours is ...

"She could not close her fixed eyes" Marvellous. The rhyming wasn't forced, thre was no cliche, good use of repetition, imagery and mention of colours. Great ideas, and very well ...

Great description, I liked it a lot. I haven't really got anything bad to say about it. Good job, you seem to have a knack for description.